小学生作文习作·植物　A Plant

小学生作文习作·植物　A Plant

桃树　A Peach Tree

My Grandma lives in a house with a big garden. In the garden, there is a big peach tree. Its trunk is big. Its branches are long. It has many green leaves. My brother and I like to go to my Grandma's house. The peach tree is blossoming when spring comes. The flowers are pink and white. They are so beautiful. In summer we can play games and have a rest under the tree. The flowers then become fruits in autumn and we can eat delicious peaches.

点评

小作者通过描述外婆家桃树的外形和特征，把春天桃花朵朵绽放，夏天洒下一片绿阴，秋天硕果累累的桃树的形象很诗意地展示在我们面前。最终，小作者俏皮地表现出自己渴望品尝美味桃子的迫不及待的心情，从另一个侧面刻画了小作者对桃树的喜爱，使文章锦上添花。

重点表达

1. The peach tree is blossoming. 桃花开了。

2. The flowers become fruits in autumn and we can eat delicious peaches. 到了秋天桃树结果实时，我们就能吃到美味的桃子了。

我是一株植物　A Plant

Hello, I'm a plant. I'm very beautiful. My flowers are pink and yellow. My stalk is green and long. I have many leaves. They are green, too. I have some roots. They are brown and short. I'm sad today, because it is raining. I can't take a sun-bath.

点评

同一个命题，本文小作者与上一位小作者的切入点明显不同。前一位小作者写实，让人清晰地了解了桃树这种植物。而本文的小作者另辟蹊径，运用拟人手法对植物进行了描述，让读者了解到植物的各种功能和特征。文中最后写道“今天下雨了，我很伤心，因为我不能晒日光浴了”，富有童趣。在欣赏这篇文章之余，我们能了解到植物的生长需要阳光这个自然规律。非常有创意。

重点表达

1．take a sunbath 晒日光浴