小学生作文习作·野生动物，_____　A Wild Animal, _____

小学生作文习作·野生动物，_____　A Wild Animal, _____

熊　A Wild Animal, a Bear

Look at this animal. It's a big bear.

The bear has a big head, a short tail, and big soles with hooked claws at the ends of the toes. It eats meat, fruits and nuts. There are many kinds of bears, such as brown bear, polar bear and black bear. Most of them live in the forest. They can climb trees. They can catch fish. They are very strong. They are clever.

Listen! There is a great noise! The bear is coming here. It's dangerous! Look, it is peeling a banana! I like it very much. Do you like it?

点评

本文采取了动静结合的方式描写了动物——熊，从在动物园里看见的熊开始，写到这一类动物的共同习性和特征，细细描述了它的外形和种类，将熊的形象丰富饱满起来。然后，作者话锋一转，把大家拉回动物园，亲临其境。纵观全文，小作者用词比较丰富，条理清晰，安排和构思十分巧妙。

重点表达

1．big soles with hooked claws at the ends of the toes 厚厚的脚掌上长着末端带着尖爪的脚趾

2．There are many kinds of bears, such as brown bear, polar bear and black bear. 熊有很多种类，如灰熊、北极熊和黑熊。

many kinds of 许多种类

polar bear 北极熊

松鼠　A Wild Animal, a Squirrel

It has a long big tail, two small black eyes, a small body and sharp fingernails. It looks like a mouse when it is running, but it isn't a mouse. It lives on the trees. Have you got the answer? Let me tell you, it is a squirrel.

Some squirrels are brown and some are grey. They are all quite small in size but they can climb to the top of trees very quickly. They like to eat pinecones and nuts. When autumn comes, squirrels bury pinecones into the earth. They can eat them in winter. Do you think that is interesting?

Squirrels have big and fluffy tails. When it is raining, the tail can be an umbrella. If the weather is cold, the tail can be a quilt. When a squirrel jumps down from a tree, the tail can be a parachute. Even more, when a squirrel fights with other animals, the tail can be its weapon. What a useful tail!

点评

本文小作者描写松鼠这一野生动物时注重详略，从它特有的外貌、习性、动作开始，到其特有的储存食物的特点，尤其是对松鼠那条尾巴的特别功能进行了详细描述，让我们对这一活泼可爱的小动物有了比较全面的感性认识。本文语言流畅，句式丰富多变，读来妙趣横生，是一篇值得学习的文章。

重点表达

1．It looks like a mouse. 它看上去有点像老鼠。

2．quite small in size 个头很小

3．climb to the top of the tree 爬到树顶

4．When a squirrel jumps down from a tree, the tail can be a parachute. 当松鼠从树上跳下的时候，尾巴可以用作降落伞。

5．Even more, when a squirrel fights with other animals, the tail can be its weapon. 更有甚者，当松鼠与其他动物开战时，尾巴可以作为武器。