假如我是一朵云评语？英文双语对照

“大漠孤烟直”，“孤云独去闲”，这些诗句写出了云的悠然自得。我多么想像云一样逍遥自在啊！而且云可以给炎热的夏季带来一丝凉爽：云可以给干旱的土地带来雨水，带来生机。我多么想像云一样帮助人们啊！

　　我是一朵云，悠闲地出来闲逛了。天空中万里无云，我一个朋友也没有。这时候，我看见地面上的树木有气无力地耷拉着脑袋，听到知了在树上懒懒地打着哈欠。农民伯伯们挥着锄头，顶着烈日，有的在给农作物浇水、施肥，有的在给农作物锄草……他们汗流浃背，时不时地给自己擦汗，衣服都湿透了。嘴里还不时地抱怨：“唉，真热啊，如果有一朵云为我们遮挡遮挡太阳，那该多好啊！”听到了这句话，我心想：是啊，我现在闲着没事，不如帮他们遮挡太阳，做一件有意义的事吧！于是，我赶紧飞奔到农民伯伯们的上方，为他们遮住了烈日。看，农民伯伯们多高兴，笑呵呵地说：“这朵云真是‘及时云’啊，多么善解人意，乐于助人！”没有了强烈的阳光，农民伯伯们劳作起来可开心了！看到这情景，想对我能帮助需要我帮助的人并使他们快乐，我也开心极了！

　　我帮助了农民伯伯以后，又开始了新的旅程。飘呀飘呀，我来到了一片荒无人烟的沙漠。沙子在烈日的炙烤下闪着耀眼的光芒，滚烫滚烫的，我看不到任何生机。沙漠边缘，工人们正顶着烈日忙着植树造林、绿化家园，可是树木受不了这烈日与干旱的折磨，已经奄奄一息。看着这些垂头丧气的小树苗，植树工人们只有不停地浇灌，但是无济于事，他们无可奈何地摇摇头，愁眉苦脸地说：“唉，这时候如果来场雨，哪怕是小雨也好啊！我们的辛苦就不会白费了。”听了他们的话我感到了惭愧，自己为什么不经常光顾这里呢？人们多么需要我呀，于是我赶紧呼唤我的兄弟姐妹们，大家同心协力使出浑身本领，下了一场大雨，滋润了这些小树。奇迹出现了，你看小树重新抬起了头，显得多有精神啊！“真是太好了，真是太好了！有了这云，有了这及时雨，我们的家园有救了，真得感谢它们呀！”植树工人激动万分地说。我又帮助了人们，心里更高兴了，我决定经常来这里帮忙，直到这荒漠变成绿洲……

　　古人云：“闲云野鹤。”我多么想同云一样逍遥自在啊！假如我是一朵云，就会让人们过着幸福欢乐的生活。

　　评语：一片逍遥自在的云，多么让人羡慕呀！作者假想自己成了一片云，为农民伯伯遮阳，为沙漠中的小树浇灌，折射出少年儿童美好的心灵。习作的首尾引用了诗句，与全文交融在一起，富有诗意。

"Smoke of big desert Gu is straight " , "Gu cloud goes alone idle " , these line drew up of the cloud carefree and content. How do I envisage the cloud euqally easygoing ah! And Yun Ke brings with giving burning hot summer cool: Yun Ke brings water with giving arid land, bring lease of life. How do I envisage the cloud to help people euqally!

I am one cloudlet, carefree ground came out to stroll. In the sky cloudless, my friend also is done not have. At that time, I see ground tree is weak ground slouch head, hear cicada lazy on the tree lazy ground is hitting yawn. Brandish wears farmer uncles hoe, carrying burning sun on the head, some is watering crop, fertilization, some give is in crop weeds... their streaming with sweat, brush sweat from time to time to oneself, the dress is drenched. Still complain often in the mouth: "Alas, true heat, if one cloudlet is sun of keep out of our keep out, this are much then better! " heard this word, my heart thinks: Be, I at a loose end does not have a thing now, be inferior to helping sun of their keep out, do a significant thing! Then, I gallop rapidly the upper part of farmer uncles, obscured for them burning sun. Look, farmer uncles are much gladder, laugh ah breathe out the ground to say: "This cloudlet is really ' seasonable cloud ' ah, how understanding, be happy to help a person! " did not have intense sunshine, farmer uncles work rise but happy! See this circumstance, want to be able to help the person that needs me to help make them happy to me, I am extremely happy also!

After I helped farmer father's elder brother, began again new itinerary. Wave ah wave, I come to a desolate and uninhabited desert. Sand bakes next shining in the broil of burning sun a dazzling ray, of boiling hot boiling hot, I cannot see any lease of life. Desert brim, workers are carrying home of burning sun is busy afforestation, afforest on the head, but tree is overcome this burning sun and arid torment, had been about to die. Look at these crestfallen small sapling, forest workers keep irrigating only, but of no help, ground of their have no alternative shakes shake one's head, say woebegonely: "Alas, at that time if come a rain, even if be spit it may not be a bad idea ah! Our hardship won't waste. " I felt the word that heard them to be ashamed, oneself why not often here? How does people need me, then I call my brotherly sisters rapidly, everybody exert of make concerted efforts all over competence, rained heavily, moist these sapling. The miracle appeared, you saw sapling raise a head afresh, appear much more invigorative! "Be too good really, be too good really! Had this cloud, had this timely rain, our home can be saved, must thank them really! " forest worker is excited say extremely. I helped people again, in the heart gladder, I decide to often come here to help, become oasis till this desert...

The ancients cloud: "Idle Yun Yehe. " how do I want to be the same as the cloud euqally easygoing ah! If I am one cloudlet, with respect to the life that can let people live happy joy.

Commment: An easygoing cloud, how to let a person envy! Author him hypothesis became one cloudlet, for farmer uncle sunshade, for desert medium sapling irrigates, reflection gives the heart of teenager children happiness. The from beginning to end of do exercises in composition cited line, blend together with full text, be full of poetic flavour.